Rate this poem i wrote?

... 1-10 would be LOVELY but it doesnt really matter.

All I want to know is if it seems confusing to anyone else... It's for my freshman genre class.... it was a description assighnment. :) Due tomorrow, im kinda nervrous. Anyway,

Its about the painting, girl in a blue armchair by cassat. here's a link :

http://www.nga.gov/cgi-bin/pimage?61102+...

POEM:

Girl In A Blue Armchair

She could feel the anger boiling through her-

A streak of rebellion in a young life of forced compromise.

They said she didn閳ユ獩 have a choice,

That she didn閳ユ獩 have a say in something like this,

But she knew she did-

And so she sat.

She plopped down on the chair and held still,

Arm propped up behind her head,

Shielding her from the sharp poke of the couch閳ユ獨 buttons

Against the clips perfectly hidden beneath her heavy

mop of dark wavy hair,

They were the only thing holding it up,

But she would pull them out.

The left arm was slung carelessly across the armrest

Of the tacky too-old armchair,

Which scratched at her knees because her dress was

crumpled up,

And she knew the wrinkles were going to set in,

And her mother would threaten to no longer press her clothes,

If they were just going to end up looking like

They had been though a machine-

But she didn閳ユ獩 care,

She let it stay that way.

And didn閳ユ獩 even think about crossing her legs.

Her eyes were frustrated, uncooperative brown beads,

Staring with malice at the dead, gray-green floor.

She wanted to say it matched the furniture well enough,

Highlighting the coarse, fibrous patches of color

amidst the sea of blue cloth,

But they didn閳ユ獩.

She felt alone in this unfinished house,

With it閳ユ獨 empty tan walls, and clear, curtain-less windows.

She felt alone without part of her family,

When it was just her living in her grandmother閳ユ獨 house,

Because she had stolen the money from

Her father閳ユ獨 wallet,

And used it to buy the new pair of socks She had wanted for so long.

But had never been allowed.

To her now, they were just the same as the other

hideous, worthless pieces of cloth that were forced upon her feet.

PS... I WILL CHOOSE A BEST ANSWER :)

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uhm i think this poem is not that good...srry work at it a lil better!

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Its not done? Im sorry, ut I cant read a poem longer than that, why dont you just write a book, then people will know what there getting themselves into. But other than that, well, it really does need to be shortened, I dont nessasarily want something to be short, but I want it to get to the point no dilly dallying. It's not very eloquent. You start something great and then end with something a 5th grader could have written. Its not terrible but it needs work. Its got real potential.

Actually I change my mind. This poem sux ***. The only thing that needs to be said is like the first 3 sentences. the rest is nonsense. No one gives a s hit if her mother wont press her clothes. All of this is just describing a set, a scene, but nothing is going on in that scene. Its like a play were all the scharacters just sit down for 2 hours.

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Very nice. I can feel a lot of passion in your poem. I can also feel reality and truth. I can't write poems very well, but yours is a very good poem with lots of passion. I give it a 10! Super-great job! Sincerely, Tracy